Thursday, August 18, 2011

Write on Wednesdays - The Hurricane.



Write On Wednesdays Exercise 10 - A Gift of Serendipity... Take Felicity's Word of the Week. Write it at the top of your page. Set your timer for 5 minutes. Write the first words that come into your head after the Word of the Week. Stop writing when the buzzer rings. 

Felicity's Word of the Week is...

Piqued:
A state of vexation caused by a perceived slight or indignity; a feeling of wounded pride.tr.v. piqued, piqu·ing, piques
1. To cause to feel resentment or indignation.
2. To provoke; arouse: The portrait piqued her curiosity.
3. To pride (oneself): He piqued himself on his stylish attire.
 
 
 
This week I shied away from my friend Suzie. Not for any particular reason, simply because the word 'piqued' (which I love, by the way) sent a brand new story rushing and rambling inside my head. Once again I feature a tumultuous female, maybe because I am one.....
 
 
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She piqued his interest the moment she entered the room. Not for her beauty or elegance...because in reality she was really quite plain. But for her sheer presence. She radiated brilliance, gaiety, an effortless air of vivacity. He was later to discover that it masked the turmoil within.
 
That day she had entered his life like a hurricane. Moving, churning, tumbling, falling. In and out, up and down. He never knew what was to happen next. Her unpredictability made his life disturbing, difficult, incredible.
 
He was the calm and she was the storm madly crashing around him. He was the earth and she was the sea; changing, fluctuating, volatile.
 
Write On Wednesdays
 

10 comments:

  1. Love it Lene. Very descriptive. You, a tumultuous female? Never! LOL

    Anne xx

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  2. Thanks Anne. It's a bit brief this week, I had trouble getting five minutes without an interruption from my children! And yes, quite tumultuous here...just ask my Hubby!

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  3. Love, love, love it! I love that your character is the one to pique someone else's interest. Love the turmoil.
    Hope life at yours becomes a little less tumultuous and you get more than 5 minutes to yourself next week
    Sannah xx

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  4. Wow!
    You are obviously a lover of words and what a way you have with them.
    The last lines in this piece had me thinking about a sturdy lighthouse in the midst of a tumultuous sea - great imagery.

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  5. Ooh! Lots and lots of gorgeous words here! The rhythm of the description matches the motion you're describing her and it works really well to create a mood. The mood is exciting and ominous!

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  6. I loved the contrast between the two - his steadiness, her volatility. Lovely use of words to build a picture.

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  7. A good descriptive piece.Nice juxtaposition between Earth and Sea too. :)

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  8. I really liked this, the way you strung the words together echoed the movement of the hurricane.

    "an effortless air of vivacity" - Wonderful!

    And I too like the Yin and Yang here. Great work, Lene

    Gill x

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  9. WOW how and where do I start naming off all the things I love about this piece? You did a marvelous job with the word and wove such an intricate description that everything was put on hold while I savored the words. Can't wait to read more of your work!

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  10. This is a lovely lovely piece. I want to know more ...

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