Frivolous chatter, insignificant chatter, chatter to cover up the awkwardness of the moment. Meaningless words to deceive those around her into thinking that she was OK...that everything was OK.
She really didn't expect to see him so soon after their parting. The pain was still raw and fresh. A new wound. He smiled at her briefly across the room and her face burned and smarted with the embarrassment of it all. How dare he stand there and look so handsome, so nonchalant, like he didn't have a care in the world?
Partaking in the useless talk of those around her to cover the rush of emotions that assailed her. Laughing at nothing in particular, and all the while his eyes burned into her, reducing her into a state of nerves and tension.
Her laughter was false, her words were idle, his presence hung over her like a shadow. And then to her horror...her complete and utter disbelief....he started to approach her. Taking slow, measured footsteps, looking for all the world like a man with a purpose. She gasped aloud, forgetting for a moment her surroundings. To her it seemed like they were the only two people in the room...in the world. She shivered, briefly experiencing a whisper of delicious apprehension........
Fantastic. I felt like I was her. Well done.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great build up of tension. Great effort. :)
ReplyDeleteI love this! You captured the emotions of the heroine beautifully. Those damned handsome exes! x
ReplyDeleteOoh I just shivered with the emotion and tension you have created here! Great work.
ReplyDeleteI think we've all been there! Damn those ex's, they should evaporate when we are done with them (or them with us;) Brilliantly captured!
ReplyDeleteWhat a great read (and a very cool idea for a writing start!) x
ReplyDeleteA 'whisper of delicious apprehension' indeed. I want to know what happens next. I'm keeping my fingers crossed that thsi couple pop up again in another WoW writing exercise. :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you all so much!
ReplyDeleteA little strange that the first thing that popped into my head after reading this line was a 'handsome ex', firstly because I don't have any (handsome ones that is) and secondly because I've not been in a situation like this since I was around 17!
I enjoyed this activity immensely, although I was a little worried I sounded like a Mills & Boon novel! I also loved reading all the different posts written by everyone else. There are some seriously talented writers out there!
Can't wait for next week!
Can finally comment here, yay!
ReplyDeleteMy favorite bit was the first line, all the chatter words actually sounded like chattering. It was nice to read and I think you will definitely be able to continue with this story next week if you fancy it. It will fit the prompt perfectly! I am giving away a few hints about next week's W.o.W because I am looking forward to our guest poster's exercise. Glad you are looking forward to it also! Gill xo
Hi Lene! (Just catching up now after a bad week with computer problems.)
ReplyDeleteJane Eyre's one of my favourites too. You've done a great job this week.
Re your latest post too. I was a book worm when I was young and so is my daughter. My son, not so much. He loves listening to stories but hasn't caught on to recognising letters (only a few) or words yet. He starts Prep next year and my daughter is in Grade 1 now. It's great if you have a love for reading. Hope you're having a nice weekend!
Anne @ Domesblissity